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Monday, March 3, 2008

kaatil aankhein ( killer eyes)...

He climbed up the stairs...she was there...standing there at the end of the steps...she took the overcoat he was carrying...and led him inside...She hung the overcoat on the hanger and he proceeded towards his abode and took his seat...he leaned over and looked out of the little window....the sky was glittering with the infinite stars..it seemed like shiney sparkles on a dark coloured bedsheet...so calm and yet amazing...

She tapped him on the shoulder...he came out of his own world and looked at her....and then at the glass of water in her hand...she had a slight smile on her face...he took the glass from her and took a sip...she moved off...but he kept looking at her...the glass with half the water still in there...he was jus waiting for her to turn back n look at him again....as soon as she reached the end of the corridor..she turned back to look back..n then her hair fell over here face..covering one eye..n she looked through the hair...n he knew ...that she knew he was looking at her...

He looked away towards the window...and then picked up the magazine kept on the desk in front of him and started browsing through the various articles...some were on politics..talking about international and national issues..some talked about sports...some about fashion...but he wasnt reading them..he was thinking about her...the way the hair came up on her face n covered her face...he was thinking if he was with her on a vacation..spending a calm evening on the lonely beach with just the sea to give them company and the camp fire....

As lost he was in his thoughts...he didnt see her come up to him...she told him..."dinner is ready"...and she brought some food over...she wasnt feeling hungry so she served him the food and went back...he ate a few pieces of the chicken..it was good...after all she had served it to him..how couldnt it be good...he was thirsty n the glass in front of him was empty..he thot there was water...but thirst had taken over...he called for her to get him some water...she brought some water over...she started pouring the water in the glass..he looked at her...she looked at him...their eyes met for the first time..it seemed the time had stopped for a few seconds...the glass filled up...n before it could spill out..the trance was broken..she looked down..the hair covered her face..n then in a split second she backed off and went back to the end of the corridor to her room..to her abode...he just kept looking..and then finally drank a sip of the water..

He threw the tray in the trash can outside...and went back to his seat...closed his eyes and just relaxed...time just seemed to drift away.....he was lost in his world...and then there was a voice calling to him...he opened his eyes...it was her...she was there..standing with the hair falling over her face ever so slightly..made her look like a dream...and then she took up the onboard mic and said....."Ladies and Gentlemen, we will be landing in a few minutes...thank you for flying with us...hope u had a great flight and look forward to serving u again"...



He smiled to himself...he didnt even get to realize how time had flown by...and he knew he should have told her "you have the most amazing eyes" when their eyes had met...but now he was climbing down the steps of the aircraft..and she was there inside...lost in her own world..and he didnt know if he would see her again...he smiled...and looked back...she was there at the gate..smiling....this is what he had been waiting for..to see her smile back before he goes off in off in to the swarm of people at the airport..and he looked at her and said to himself...."yes..."...he knew he cud fall in love again...

guys this is my first attempt at trying to write a story..so pardon the inconsistencies...hope u like it...:D

btw ur views on the 2 posts below are still welcome..hope u contribute :)

64 comments:

Solitaire said...

Not bad at your first attempt! In fact, very good. Reminded me of a couple that I know. The guy fell in love with the air hostess, proposed to her, married her, and been married for the past 25 years!

Wonderful me said...

Accha hain...good work to begin with:-)hope to see many more stories...btw,u also had met sum great air hostess rite?????newez,gud work!!!

Keshi said...

I thought u were gonna put a pic of my eyes...duh!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@solitaire...thnx...well thts good to knw :)

maverick said...

@wonderful...thanx...lets see if i write more stuff up :)

maverick said...

@keshi...aye aye captain

Lena said...

into writing stories, huh??
was a nice first attempt. You can give it a second try ;)

maverick said...

@lena...lol...not into them..jus gave it a try...will write something if i get some thots going :)

Mez said...

Hey this is Keshi's pic right?

maverick said...

@mez..lol...read the comments above....

gunj said...

great attempt thr...u shud do more of these
n y is keshi complainin? they are already her eyes..inne?

maverick said...

@gunj...lol..thnx...pehle nahi thi...baad main daali...

divya said...

woooooooooooooow is all i can say :P

maverick said...

@divya...lol...say something more too :)

Mez said...

Telme...why she sayin no if itz herz only..huh

maverick said...

@mez...pehle nahi thi woh pic.. :D

Nature Nut /JJ Loch said...

That was delicious, Maverick! I love the imagery of the glass of water and the tension building in the story. And then to find it was a daydream! You're a natural. Had me spellbound.

Thanks for a great start to the day.:D

Hugs, JJ

Vandita said...

Kya baat hai Mav, not bad not bad at all...infact till i hadn't come to the end i was really thinkin ki kuch aur hoga but "ladies and gentlemen" padhte hi i exclaimed "lord this is soo you:P"
very gripping...:)
PS: congozzzz we won!!

maverick said...

@jj..glad u liked it...it was my first attempt :)

maverick said...

@vandita...lol..."it was so you"..wats dat suppose to mean? :D

and congos to u too :)

Anonymous said...

wow Keshi di aankhein raat bhar soyi nahi.........

Aankhen bhi hoti he dil ki jubaaa, bin bole kar deti he dil ke yeh halat bayan

Kali kali aankhen yeh gore gore gall.......

ankhiyo ke jharokhe se jo dekha maine saaware

ok so this many songs dedications to keshi s eyes :)))

usne kaha aur tumne laga bhi diye praji, sahi he :)) mezie ka post padh ke likha tha kya yeh post ?

maverick said...

@ashu g...apko to antakashri main part lena chahiye..lol...

Anonymous said...

aankhon ki antakshari ? i remember one akshay kumar song on aankhein, dont recall it rt now, but its very apt for this post....

maverick said...

@ashu g..lol..khelo jitni antakshri khelni hai :D

Keshi said...

LOL u r such a cheeky guy Mav...hahaha u replaced those beautiful eyes with my plain eyes. awwwwwwww HUGS! But I was only joking..u can put back those gorgeous eyes cmon! :)


Keshi.

Keshi said...

hehe Ashu tnxx hun! I was only teasing Mav and look wut he did LOL!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi...lol..no..now this pic shall remain here :D

Keshi said...

awwwwwwww...I feel so dumb for teasing ya b4 LOL!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi...lol...savour the moment..take a sunbath in the glory of feeling dumb...lol :D

freesherry said...

that was good.. and quite original
I seem to recall you have a thing for air hostesses :D

maverick said...

@sherry..lol..i ld like to phrase it as..i have a thing for gorgeous women who can carry themselves well... :D

Anonymous said...

hey keshi i hope u did understand the hindi lyrics, for any help contact mav, he is master of hindi!!!

maverick said...

@ashu g...tussi antakshri khelogi n i ll translate lyrics...chalo theek hai...

DollFace said...

I really enjoyed your story. You did a nice job for a first try:)

maverick said...

@dollface...good to see u again...and thanks....lets see how the story writing goes :)

The Horny Bitch said...

u got me man! I thought it was some erotic story.. Flight attendants.. my my!

maverick said...

@thb...lol...tht must ve been really disappointing :D

Nature Nut /JJ Loch said...

Maverick, keep writing. You're talented. :D

Hugs, JJ

Spiky Zora Jones said...

mav...well done. Nicely written. You surely will do more...yes? I am intrigued. Any thoughts aabout maybe writing a novella...I think you would enjoy it...Ciao babes.

Diva said...

Sexy eyes to for sure... dang!

Keshi said...

Ashu tnxx hun!

hey Mav mere ko shudh Hindi nahi aati hai ;-) so plz explain LOL!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@jj..thanks...will write something sometime :)

maverick said...

@spiky...lol..no thots abt writing novels or anything..mayb will write some more short stuff tho :)

maverick said...

@diva..lol..glad u liked them :)

maverick said...

@keshi...tumhe sab samajh agaya hai...lol :D

Keshi said...

**tumhe sab samajh agaya hai

gawwwd I need a Hindi-to-English dictionary now! LOL!


I think u said something like You're all undesrtandable? LOL!


Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi...lol...i said "im sure u understood everything" :D..howdy?

Keshi said...

lolz thats so far from how I read it!

nah I really didnt u'stand Ashu's hindi comment..she wants u the Hindi Specialist to translate it to me..plz plz plz!


*begs falling at the bottom of Mav's trousers'


LOL!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi...here are the translations...word to word..

Ashu said...

wow Keshi di aankhein raat bhar soyi nahi.........

wow..keshi's eyes didnt sleep the entire night....


Aankhen bhi hoti he dil ki jubaaa, bin bole kar deti he dil ke yeh halat bayan
eyes are the language of the heart...without speaking they tell everything (its a song)

Kali kali aankhen yeh gore gore gall.......

black black eyes...n white white cheeks (again song)

ankhiyo ke jharokhe se jo dekha maine saaware

through your eyes i saw the morning

ok so this many songs dedications to keshi s eyes :)))

usne kaha aur tumne laga bhi diye praji, sahi he :)) mezie ka post padh ke likha tha kya yeh post ?

she told n u put them up..inspired by mezie's post

enjoy :D

d SINNER!!! said...

good one indeed...

dsnt look like a frst attempt at all, so u can confess that u have been writing such shorties in ur secret diaries :P (i know this suits for a gal more, but the nthin bad in tryin, who knows, u might just have)

*_*
realistic pic!!!
and seemingly u travel a lot, so dnt tell me the guy in d story is 'u'

maverick said...

@sinner...lol..this was d first attempt...n no d guy wasnt me..even tho i do travel quite frequently..lol

umangexuberance said...

arre mav ji ab tu aap bhi short story wale ho gaye.. good good
was really nice.. didn't seem like a first ever attempt :)

Solitaire said...

huhhhhhhh
I thought these were keshi's eyes and then thought that i was dumb to think that!

maverick said...

@solitaire..lol...made u think..lol

Keshi said...

aww ty for that lovely translation MAV! tnxx Ashu too!

Cmon my eyes r not soooo great LOL! But thanks I feel great :) U guys r so sweet!


btw why arent u moving from this post Mav? LOL!


Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi...lol...will put up a new post soon :)

Keshi said...

*breathes a sigh of relief*

LOL!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi..lol..done :)..should i add ur pic to it?

Keshi said...

*chases Mav ard with a butterfly net*

oii!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi..u ld need a bigger net...lol :D

Keshi said...

hahaha true blondy me!

Keshi.

maverick said...

@keshi...lol...self discovery is the best thing..aint it :)

Pri said...

lol!! i knew u had this thing for airhostesses...
ahem! seems like keshi should switch careers ;)heehee

maverick said...

@pri...lol :D